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Post by .:Orube:. on Jul 9, 2008 13:35:48 GMT -5
My new brilliant idea. What: Story Name: The Illusion of Darkness Genra: Fantasy, Angst, Spiritual Blurb: My eyes are open but nothing is in view, only this facade of darkness. Why do you play games with light and darkness. You cannot keep me here in the dark. Let me out, or i'll scream
Two orphan girls, _____ and _____*, discover they have strange psycik abilitys. At first it is fun, messing around with the minds of other girls in the orphanage, but something goes terribly wrong. They have to run away from what they have done. But someone is running to catch up with them.
Who is chasing them? Why do they have powers? What is the secret of the Darkness Brethren?** And Which side are they on? The Dark? or The Light? * Names still pending** Depending
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Post by .:Orube:. on Jul 9, 2008 13:44:32 GMT -5
I need suggestive comments. No Lol or lovin it or random fillers. Need critisism or other stuff. If i get 5 long and useful answers i'll add in a sneak preview!
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Post by Tridart/Sandpit on Jul 9, 2008 14:12:52 GMT -5
I voted Isaabelle, Francesca, and Charlotte. You spelled psychic wrong.
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Post by Tom on Jul 10, 2008 1:30:18 GMT -5
i voted rose, jessica and emma and seems lke a good story
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Post by .:Orube:. on Jul 10, 2008 13:08:58 GMT -5
@trindy: I ment to. In the story, magic is Majik and Psychic is Psycik. In the AU there are more Ks then need be. Any other comments? I need ideas about te story. It is a working progress so im blocked for ideas. Like i said. 5 long, helpful answers and a sneak preview is on its way. It is set in an alternative unerverse
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Post by bogdylove on Jul 10, 2008 13:44:56 GMT -5
you're to sober:((( im scared...but well, lets see what i can come with lets say that their parent chase them, because they have the potential to save that universe from their wrath..and the girls manage to find their grandma, who trains them, but she is not young anymore, and dies, the girls resurect her.....their parents find them, an they take LittleGrannyBoo as a prisoner, and than an epic battle, the girls win, and they're adopted by a loving family....tc what do you say?
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Post by Tridart/Sandpit on Jul 10, 2008 13:45:36 GMT -5
Lets see I guess you could start it off with them running away from whoever is chasing them. When that person corners them you should flashback to what happened in the orphanage.
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Post by bogdylove on Jul 10, 2008 13:48:06 GMT -5
i think i saw something like that in a movie :-?....anyway, karma cookie for tridy
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Post by Kristi on Jul 11, 2008 1:25:32 GMT -5
That's a really good idea TRidy. I think you should do what he said. Oh and I like Issabelle, Cassidy, and Rose.
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Post by Taranee on Jul 11, 2008 11:38:11 GMT -5
I voted for Cassidy and Lara. I like those names. I like the idea. I think that in their orphanage they should play tricks on an old mean woman who runs the orpanagge
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Post by .:Orube:. on Jul 12, 2008 11:19:10 GMT -5
@trindy: Yeah! FB is allways a gud idea. @tara: One of the triks goes wrong
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Post by bogdylove on Jul 12, 2008 11:51:40 GMT -5
when are we gonna see it?
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Post by .:Orube:. on Jul 13, 2008 15:24:51 GMT -5
I need 5 longish suggestive comments. so far? 3!But since i love you all so much...
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Post by .:Orube:. on Jul 13, 2008 15:48:59 GMT -5
Persperation trickled down Cassie White's forehead and her long wirery hair stuck to it. The cold air froze in her throat and lungs making it harder to breath. Her heart burn started acting up and her chest felt on fire. A stitch embeded itself in her side. Her sister, Jessica White, was having the same luck with it. She was breathing heavily and her face was flushed red but they couldn't stop. At the orphanage, the sisters found joy in using their Psychik powers to mess with the big bullkies, most of all Mandy. Mandy was large and ate a lot, mainly because she stole Cassie's and Jessica's meals and pleanty other children. She teased the other children about their parents which was impossible for her to do with the White sisters asnobody knew anything about their parents. One morning, maytron Margret opened the door and a small girl of about 6 was sleeping in a blanket with a baby of 4. All that was left was a note. Cassidy and Jessica, Hope your doing well at Papa White's and not talking about that little incident. You know how disturbed he got by the things you said last year. It's not real. Hope Brindy is okay, Mamma This note was, at that moment, safely kept in 15 year old Cassies bag. One day, five years after they were found, the note started to make sence. Mandy is now slim and quiet because of what they did. She has moments were she looks blank and departed but is soon changed back to the sweet quiet girl that the sisers changed the bully into. They did this with other girls, boosted self esteem, sofened hearts and even make an anorexic girl eat again but maytron Margret changed every thing with her harsh punishments when Jessica refused to eat her broth, Margret locked her in the Screamers Celler, so named by the children. Rats live in there and stories spead about fleash eating spiders and snakes. Jessica, at 13, was scared which unleache dthe other, darker side, to the sisters mystery. 'In the morning they will be wondering.' Whispered into the night air, not loud enough for Jessica to hear so as not to upset her. 'Wonder why maytron Margret hung herself'
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Post by Will on Jul 14, 2008 18:39:24 GMT -5
oh wow! that sounds so interesting! Are you writing chapters yet?
And I know it's too late but I still voted for Lara, Lorie, and Jasmin
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